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Don’t sell me funeral plots
on late night television
if the end is already in sight

am I supposed to pull the sheets up to my neck,
count to zero,
smile, and cease?

no

keep your pills, in all their pretty colors:
celebrex, propecia, allegra, lipitor, zanex, viagra
keep them for scrabble
keep your rogaine, your facelifts
keep your death insurance
keep your graveyard reservations

hit me running.

let me go down swinging

make it a sport:

give me a ten-minute head start
and an obstacle course.

place a beautiful girl on the far side of a mine field
and whisper, “she wants to kiss you”

target me on my feet
dodging doomsday’s in slow-mo bullet time

let me duel the grim reaper in a poetry slam

but let me lay where i fall
let the buzzards and coyotes
pick apart my bones
don’t stuff me and sew me up
waste my estate on alcohol for my wake
not formaldehyde
instead of wood for a coffin,
build me a funeral pyre
and set me ablaze like a pagan-warrior-king
sing songs,
roast marshmallows,
get drunk,
and recite your poetry
by the time we’re done
the grim reaper will beg for a vacation

i don’t have to win,
but let me believe I have a chance at immortality
even if the probability is one a billion.
those are good odds
if I’m the one

those who believe in death will die first

if I believe I’m going to live forever,
if I believe I can fly
I just might

so from the chickens before me,
sucking in their pot-bellies,
grooming their comb-overs,
I’ll craft wings from their plucked feathers
reach cruising altitude alongside Icarus
but outrace the sun

light doesn’t have the speed to catch me

these lungs won’t stop breathing,
these cells will break open replacements
this heart will beat out of sheer will
to last longer than timex or twinkies
and endure eternity
just to see how this story ends
and whether
the hero gets the girl
or a bullet to the brain

I will hold onto immortality
by my fingernails and the skin of my teeth
past the all epochs and ages and armageddons
so I can see if the end
begins the beginning all over again
or does the whole thing backwards
or upside down with inverted colors
or just stops
like in the Twilight Zone,
one second before the apocalypse

but my bet is that i
will finally sober up
take my medication
set the alarm
roll over
and turn the television off
2:00AM television offers life insurance, motorized scooters, insulin, body wraps, work out routines, diet plans, medications, hairwaxing, and plastic surgery. I want reruns of the Honeymooners, I Love Lucy, and cartoons. Just let us grow old and die naturally.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2004-07-03
HIT ME RUNNING by ~foxthepoetis the new anthem for culture zombies everywhere. It’s the hard-hitting, fast-paced tale of a man who’s ready to take on anything from the grim reaper to the apocalypse to the ever-intimidating opposite sex – and he’ll do it all from the couch in front of his television set. Hey, man, lay off the meds. You’ll wear yourself out. ( Suggested by wildoats and Featured by euphoria )
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SLenDErsUMmeRSevE Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is awesome. :D

2 am television can go suck a left nut.
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xXMusic-MuseXx Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Absolute genius, I have to say.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Blew me and my mind apart.
You earned yourself a fav, a watch, and a helicopter engine-like applause.
Bravo.
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Vivifyingly Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011
+Watch
+Fav
+<3
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011   General Artist
I'd love to post parts of this (with full credit to you, and your brilliance) over at [link] if you don't mind.
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foxthepoet Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional Writer
Go for it. You can link to my blog, too, if you want. I post poetry and poetry commentary, critique and other bits there.
[link]
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miserabel Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Woah. Really nice read, I couldn't let go of it once I started reading :)
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Illusion-Factory Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
that was a rush and I loved every second of it.

On a slightly related note this reminded me that my friends and I have a standing pact to go to each other's funerals and turn them into parties. Let's celebrate the life and not mourn the death.
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MusicalAlchemy Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Hobbyist
There are no real words for a poem that can make you feel so much in such a short space of time, oter than - Thank You. It flows, and the sentiments behind it i can believe in whole-heartedly. Truth in a sentence:

Those who believe in death with die first
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katypi Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2009

those who believe in death will die first
perfect.
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orange-sheep Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2008   Writer
light doesn’t have the speed to catch me


my favorite line. that poem was... wow. I can;t describe it. really, really amazing.
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stoopidsquig Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2008
brilliant. this has great flow.
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idi0m Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2008
I don't think my input is necessary.. but you are gifted :)
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backspace96 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2007
stellar poem.
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snodrop Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2007
I like it a lot. You are a very good writer.
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mixtapes-of-love Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
This is such a good poem about our society. I featured this in my Literature journal =)
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moejo Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
let me go down swinging

make it a sport:

give me a ten-minute head start
and an obstacle course.

place a beautiful girl on the far side of a mine field
and whisper, “she wants to kiss you”

i dont think ill ever mangae to tell you how brilliant those lines and this piece are. my hat is off to you.
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Zamnath Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2005
"even if the probability is one a billion."

one IN a billion.

Only error I saw. Def going on my faves list and def putting you on watch.

Nice life/death piece.
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kissmythesaurus Featured By Owner May 11, 2005
absolutely awesome...I love your writing style
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xXdr0psXx Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2005
Hah hah, i love it. You're great!
=D
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foxthepoet Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2005  Professional Writer
Thanks
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xXdr0psXx Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2005
Very welcome
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yummyinthetummy Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2005
that is a great poem and the fact that i don't usually like poems its a BIG compliment
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shooby423 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
"those who believe in death will die first"

I really like this line!
The whole thing was very well written though and kept me reading the whole time.

:)
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DarknessCyShadow Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2004
This poem is beyond briliance..
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zoolah Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2004
|^^^^^^^^^^^\||____
|.WORSHIP TRUCK.|||'""|""\__,_
| __I LOVE IT!! __ l||__|__|__|)
|(@)@)"""""""**|(@)(@)**|(@)

AND HAT IS AWSEOME. I LOVE THE POEM, AND EVERYTHING IN IT. THERE IS NOT ONE POSSIBLE NEGATIVE COMMENT ANYONE CAN COME UP WITH. IT IS 10 STARS OUT OF 5 STARS. AMAZING!!! :!: !!!!! :jawdrop:

*adds to favs**

I :heart: it sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much :!:
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Ice27 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2004   Photographer
i like your hit me running poem, if i told you that i understood it all, i'd be lying, but what i did understand was very...well, moving, it seems to have a very good meaning attatched to it, even if it wasnt entended, but the ending somewhat confused me, it was just a sudden change that i was not expecting, it kinda changed the entire effect of the poem. meh, oh well, it was still a great poem!
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lovelyfairy Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2004   Writer
i know is kind of late reading this poem, but alll i have to say is that..... ITS FUCKING GREAT... I love it... I love all of it. Usually i would just like parts in a poem, but yours... man no words to experce what i think about it... LOVE it...
Fairy.
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danirat Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
Finally, someone said what I've been thinking all along! YEAH!
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AmorousOne Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2004
this is a whole lotta wooooahhhh... :+fave: instantly
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khronic Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2004
here here
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ParanoidAndroid22 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2004
This hits home to me, being a fellow insomniac. I really love the lines where you beg death to let you try to live just a little longer and make it fair. I really loved how you wrapped it up and made it feel like a dream inside of reality. Good work! Keep the creativity comming! Hopefully more poetry will make daily deviation now! Have a good day.
~Eric
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foxthepoet Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional Writer
Didn't think of it that way, but I can see it now.
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d1st0rt3d Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2004
Kickass.
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TyrantOfPants Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2004
So...good...I am in awe of your command of words *awe*
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presentstranger Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2004
speechless.
:clap: << that's all i can think of.
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nieman Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
lose the last stanza, i'd say.

the whole thing is invigorating (envigorating? ah fuck its late for me) and inspiring.. a testament to testosterone, from a male's mind, but... that plain, droll little "oh well" in the end was ... entirely out of place and unneeded. If it were a statement on the futility of dreaming because of the redundency of failure to follow up, well then.. that last stanza would need one or two more for development.

Otherwise: just lose the last stanza ;|
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hezekiah Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
:clap: Much, much awesomeness... Love the ending as well :D. Excellent poem!
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CkMunsta Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004   Writer
this is too damn good man, i'm serious. this is soo refreshing, and i love the idea of a poetry slam with the reaper :lol: that would be intense..

hmm.. as well as providing you with with yet ANOTHER kiss-ass comment, i will :+fav: this too. not because you wont be expecting it, just cause it really is a fave to me.

i doubt you've read this far seems as you've bagged a DD and will be receiving about a zillion and one of these bastard comments a second, but if ya did, then i'm saying bye. lol.

BYE
:crazy: Cookie
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caesaraugustus Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
It's too long, I lost interest half way through. :zombie:

I like the style, the meter.

Too long winded though. That's the trouble with you poets. You write poetry for other poets.:frustrated:

I like Haiku.:meditation:
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HangMansJoke Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004  Student General Artist
What I wanted to say has been taken already! So I'll say this, nasty-wicked awesome. I'm going to go outside and pick a fight with a sewer troll
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xpetalsfallenx Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
**standing ovation** That simply amazing.
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xvaltheavx Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
I'm speechless and breathless...
Amazing.
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roen Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
"even if the probability is one a billion.
those are good odds
if I’m the one"

right on man. oh also, outlasting timex and twinkies. thats great! my timex is fricken indestructable. awsome poem. and i dont even like poems.
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foxthepoet Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Professional Writer
And they're both fun words
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thou-shalt-not Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
I forgot to breathe.
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jaydewrath13 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004  Student General Artist
this is an awesome peice
there are really no words i can say to show how much i really love it
it kind of ...teases the grim reaper...
kind of like...calling him out to fight...

but thats just a man looking for a challenge...
like all men...
they want to cheat death...
and avoid all fear..

*shrugs*
thats just my opinion..
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girl-uninterupted Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
Holy Mary Mother of God.


I think that sums it up.








:nerd:
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AncientFlounder Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
I can't really think of a good way to describe this but...holy shit, was that cool.
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AlexanderFrost Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2004
You have my sincerest congratulations on managing to net a DD, as a poet. That's an incredibly difficult task, as overlooked as our kind are, compared to all the pretty pictures. ;) Keep it up! :w00t:
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